Thursday, February 04, 2010

shake, rattle, and renga...

By no means do I pretend anything more than a passing acquaintance with renga. Collaborative poetry, with one poet introducing the "hokku" (haiku) stanza, followed by a couplet with 7 syllables apiece. In this round, I wrote the five introductory 3-line stanzas, and Tina provided her awesome couplets.

never a rhyme

orange night blossoms
full suns and moons on the rise
fate's equal measure

storms may rage in galaxies
yet novas transcend supah

space available

face down in the mud
Leonidas spawns fury
mighty pit there, dude

gluttonous worms, united—
‘tis a feast beyond measure

elena & the boyz

seventh period
burnt brains collide merrily
visionary arts

alizarin crimson eyes
oil on canvas speak promise

trillions of 'em

presidential coins
gold tooth displayed, open-mouthed
icing on the cake

air particles and rabbits
crescendo is where it’s at


botox in the spring
the doctor's got your gravy
manatees in bloom

Picking up pieces of you
I revel in leftovers



Blogger Tammie Lee said...

ah, I enjoy the two of you playing together.
this one really got my attention:

Picking up pieces of you
I revel in leftovers

11:56 PM  
Blogger Teresa said...

And it takes two to rumba! Really fun, although the last couplet turned my stomach a little. Fortunately, I'm not reading while I'm eating today. The words just sent me to a Chinese story called "Human-meat Buns."

1:14 AM  
Blogger murat11 said...

Tammie and Teresa: There is at least a bit of Atwood lurking in the last poem. I'm gonna go metaphorical on the couplet, though the hokku's intent is hard to dispute.

5:59 AM  
Blogger jsd said...

What Teresa said :) Haiku later.

7:57 AM  
Anonymous Tina Karagulian said...


Just so you know, the "Picking up pieces of you..." was intended to honor the parts of us that we so often want to cut out, but are nevertheless still quite important, and have a story to tell. At least that was my intent!

May you all have a day filled with creativity!


8:47 AM  
Blogger anno said...

Fancy footwork here, but you two make it look like fun. I'm still feeling special fondness for the seventh hour poem, especially with that wonderful segue from visionary arts to the alizarin crimson eyes.

11:44 AM  
Blogger murat11 said...

I shoulda titled the post "shake, renga, and roll..."

1:31 PM  
Blogger murat11 said...

Hey, jsd: Gesundheit!

1:32 PM  
Blogger murat11 said...

Mrs Baby takes the high road; Mr Baby continues on the low...

1:33 PM  
Blogger murat11 said...

Anno: It was lovely to have Tina's footwork, and extra lovely to be stumped by alizarin.

1:34 PM  

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