Saturday, August 16, 2008

Sunday Scribbling #124: Observations

(Image: "White House," by Anton Stocker)


seesaw traffic, the allegations
of crystal brine,
time after time
the visionary winterlode
casual teabreaks
variable calculations
and if you didn’t
and if you would—
see, would
ask, would
care to lie
in the thistle of
your mind’s wintry
cover, then now
is the time,
there was
the winter, &
here is the gleam
you wuz lookin’

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Blogger Devil Mood said...

Curious usage of 'wuz' in the last verse, he he.
There was the winter and here is the gleam, that's really lovely.

5:50 PM  
Blogger jsd said...

the tag - it a line from a song...

like: and if you didn't
and if you would -

[only just] see

ah but what?

6:34 PM  
Blogger murat11 said...

DM: Good evening. Curious "wuz"? How else to spell wuz, amiga? Thank you for eyes on the poem: it wuz fun to write.

jsd: Funny thing, after I read the poem back to meself, I thought it should/could be a song. But what indeed? (I like your "only just.")

8:25 PM  
Blogger Tammie Lee said...

seesaw indeed
now then was the time, I agree

yes a song, are you a musician?

I started humming a song the other day about a recent sweet experience, now daily I attempt to hone and add to it. I am NOT a musician, this is so new to me and my mind that does not remember, words and tunes!

10:28 AM  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

Wuz..I like that!!

Has anything changed?

10:41 AM  
Blogger murat11 said...

Tammie: I am not a musician, but I would love to pen a country mega-hit for Patty Loveless and retire to my woodland retreat by the sea (woods for me; sea for Tina and Walden). I'm not sure crystal brine allegations are country enuff for her, though.

Good to hear from you.

GT: Wuz there any reason not to?

3:39 PM  
Blogger Devil Mood said...

It reminds me of a favourite expression of mine: we wuz robbed! ;)

4:09 PM  
Blogger murat11 said...

DM: When "poetizing," the rappa sometimes sneaks out, eh? He likes to "wuz" all over the place.

Middle-aged rapper: there's a frightening thought.

Peace, amiga.

7:29 PM  
Blogger danni said...

liking the rapper sneaking out like he wuz all about it!!!

11:11 AM  
Blogger murat11 said...

danni: "And she was..."

1:40 PM  
Blogger San said...

From the observational "seesaw" entering traffic to the "gleam" I "wuz lookin' for"--a nice pileup of image and sound and suggestion.

I always marvel at your abstract/concrete pairings, your "allegations of crystal brine." Thank you, Paschal, for your "casual teabreaks" with their "variable calculations."

1:46 PM  
Blogger murat11 said...

Thank you as always, San. Abstract / concrete pairings beat the hell out of free associative psychoanalysis: helluva lot cheaper.

2:26 PM  
Blogger AscenderRisesAbove said...

wow that is an amazing shot

10:03 AM  
Blogger murat11 said...

ARA: Ain't it, though? Click on the link and go see more, plenty more.

2:15 PM  

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